Description: this poem was written about a special person in a time when i was in a state of confusion and anger. It is not meant to bash or to offend anyone. It was just a way of expressing my feelings.
The Game of Deceit -------------------------------------------
this madness is useless
his anger and attitude consumes me
Im tired of playing this game
Im tired of following imature steps.
There's doubt in my heart
it clearly shows in my eyes
He is proud, he can't let go
Im pudding, there is no hope.
All faith in this is lost
Pandora's box has opened wide
I will not follow, I refuse to march
I have already explored that path
If he refuses to back off
soon enough this pact will crack.
because this nonsense with me wont ever last.
Ahh the feuding relationship, its always best to move on chica. I liked the poem, it had some good ideas, like pandoras box/you have already been down this road etc. One thing I think you could find a better word then useless in the 1st line -useless is just... useless to use. You are trying to say how much it consumes you, well its negetive ,so we know its not usefull so find a word that describes why tyou are so consumed and it might work a lil better, (just a thought) see ya~L.t
Awww poor Andrea! The poem all together was very well written but I sort of lost the flow a couple of times. The pandoras box part is what really interest me. The only thing I have to say about the poem is try to make it flow more other than that, good job!