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    dots Submission Name: Addicteddots
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    Author: jinx
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 44/58/26
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 403
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    Description:
       I wrote this when i was an this school trip and we couldnt have music. i dont really know waht else to say.... you might notice a few similarities with one of my other poems, but that was not intentional. i only just noticed it myself. (oops) i don't really know what i want to hear about this, but all i ask is that you be brutal: i'm considering reading this in class tomorrow.


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    dotsAddicteddots
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    Day one
    and the itching starts.
    First in your fingertips,
    but it spreads
    until your whole body
    itches
    screams and
    craves the rhythm,
    craves the beat.

    Day two
    the devil inside you
    wakes;
    blearily at first
    but he thaws
    and melts
    and spreads,
    squirming and writhing
    within your veins.

    Day three
    he starts to carve.
    He rips strips of flesh
    from your stomach,
    digs deep gouges
    and they bleed eternally -
    But what will he do with the pieces?

    Day four
    Its nearly over,
    but the worst
    is still yet to come.
    Fleshy worms
    crawl from your stomach
    up the back of your throat
    and wriggle,
    dancing in aguish
    choking you,
    until you open your mouth
    and spit.
    Now breathe.
    Suck down the air and chain it up
    inside your lungs.
    That’s it;
    you’ve broken the devil
    but
    beware!
    The monster lives
    within you still
    and lurks–
    waiting to feed.




    Submitted on 2005-02-17 19:27:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yah, hella good writting here. I like the most the end how you say waiting to feed, hella true. It's like my poem LOVE, I say at the end. love is the death of us all. You should read it. It's written in the same style as AT EASE was. You will totally understand this one though. Keep up the good writting, I'll read more of yours now.
    | Posted on 2005-02-20 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]



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