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    dots Submission Name: Green (Manic pt1)dots

    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       yeah.....this poem has an odd flow to it...it's better heard then read....it's called Green because I was doing a series of poems based on colours and green is kinda manic for me. and please, dont question my grammar....it all has a purpose

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    dotsGreen (Manic pt1)dots

    I feel kinda empty/sad
    full/hurt wanting more/less
    to fill the space that
    haunts my thoughts of
    you are counterproductive
    and a reverie is but
    that so/ goodbye to the
    yellow/white roses rotting
    on the window sill
    keep a candle burning
    hope I find my way
    home to the/tragedy at/
    hands on the clock tick
    life/away from the land
    only sea and sky left
    in my life now

    Submitted on 2005-02-18 16:06:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think this is very good...its like one of those circle a phrase forms you get...i like the way you wrote this...very cool read and i wasnt confused by any grammar or junk so yea...cant wait to read other color poems!

    | Posted on 2005-02-18 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I love reading new styles of poetry! It makes me want to think of different styles for myself. I like it!

    only sea and sky left

    Great line! When you think about it, the world's comprised more of seas and skies than land...

    Nice write!
    | Posted on 2005-02-18 00:00:00 | by musaXX | [ Reply to This ]

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