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    dots Submission Name: Perfect Envydots
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    Author: ariesmind
    ASL Info:    24/Male/Atlanta
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 75/79/18
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Prose/Comedy
    Total Views: 282
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1409



    Description:
       i get jealous alot ...so this is sumthing that came from it.


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    dotsPerfect Envydots
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    Jealousy arose
    As i watched beauty perform a ritualistic dance
    In front of my love

    "How dare he??!!!"

    Perfect form, perfect rythm,
    Perfect face....

    My love greets and embraces this flirt.

    How pathetic...

    I run to the bathroom...My clothes fall to the floor with hesitance...
    My head raises to face the full body mirror in front of me..

    Perfect...ha.
    Ill show em perfect.

    Chest flexes,thighs tighten,arms curl
    Giving face, from different angles.

    Good but not perfect.."i thought"

    Tears start to run down my face...

    Who the fuck wants perfect anyway????

    I wash my face and glance at my eyes.

    "Strange" i thought

    I never knew my eyes were green

    Ater a few minutes of composing myself.

    I return to view this seducer in conversation and laughter with my love.

    My love looks at me....smiles and speaks....
    "Baby i want you to meet , my brother, His name is Confidence"

    A very dry "hello"escapes my lips.

    A smirk forms on my face.

    "Confidence i think to myself"..huh..
    Who thought someone had more then me..




    Submitted on 2005-02-18 17:43:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I loved your use of envy/green/eyes/brown. Very creative. Good use also that the brother was named beauty...luckily we are all beautiful inside and out even if we don't always know it. Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-02-18 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      very original. I like the use of the eye color change to denote jealousy. I can feel the emotion thoughout this poem. it's very good. I wouldn't change a thing.
    | Posted on 2005-02-18 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]



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