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Final Goodbye

Author: WaxingPoetic
ASL Info:    27 ~ Louisiana
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Words: 176
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Re-post. More of a venting poem to help me deal with stuff, but I'm sure it might mean something to somebody

Final Goodbye

I have one favor to ask of you.
It won’t be hard,
I can promise you that.
Before you run off and leave me forever,
Please do this for me,
It’s all that I ask:
Just one last hug is what I am needing
To remember our friendship,
And the times we shared.
A tight embrace,
Your arms encompassing,
Just to let me know that you cared.
Wedding bells are heard in the distance.
As much as I detest it,
You will be gone to another.
People think that I like you,
You know, like you,
But we both know I love you like a brother.
I hate to see you leave me now.
We’ve been through so much,
It’s so hard for me.
Losing you is a pain in my heart.
She doesn’t understand,
She just doesn’t see,
That the bond we had is soon to end.
You say it won’t be we both know that’s a lie.
So please, please, just do this for me:
Put your arms around me for one final goodbye.

Submitted on 2005-02-19 10:21:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It really is quite good. At least i think that it is. Althought the lines,People think that I like you,
You know, like you,
don't really make that musch sence. But Other than that it is good. But you might want to not repeat your self over and over again. It seems that you are trying to make it longer so you say the same message over again. But i think it would be better if it was a little shorter and cut out all the you know it will send but you don;t say and stuff. But it is good.
| Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]
  i really enjoyed reading this poem. it was really sad though! I really liked the way you said the fealings. The emotions were really strong.
| Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by Devils Angel | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't see anything wrong with repetition. it sometimes emphasises a point even more. At first I thought this was someone who had died but then i realized it was another girl coming in the circle. you just remain strong and have trust that your friendship is strong enough to survive.
| Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by Rukiya Faizah | [ Reply to This ]
  Is a lovely poem and it reminds of sumthing that i wrote when i left school and all my mates. And a poem i wrots when a bloke swered me over. That one line...She doesn’t understand, She just doesn’t see.
This poem brings out all of you emotion and says alot about your friendship you had. But all is not lost. email and letter writting is still a good thing and phone calls too. chin up mate and its a very good poem. I like.
| Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by Bailey19 | [ Reply to This ]

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