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    dots Submission Name: Haikud Infect Youdots

    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Misc
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       Just my feeble attempt at a Haiku, please don't be rough on me. and if I sneeze watch out

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    dotsHaikud Infect Youdots

    My love so penurious.
    H.I.V and me.


    Submitted on 2005-02-19 15:53:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm sorry but i didn't undertand that at all. The only reason I could pronounce the first word/line is because i know hiaku's only have five syllables in the first line. The format is right-5-7-5, but i didn't understand it...please tell me what it means
    | Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by Lostlover | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL i didnt get it either. i need to get my dictionary. butttttt i dont feel like it, so instead you can just let me know what the eff'in eff this is about.
    | Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, here's my take. You didn't have enough money to pay for a high class hooker because of the fact that you are so penurious, so you settled for a bargain barbie and now you have VD. I am enthralled by these haiku's. I read some earlier and it is really something I want to try. Good first one. Magnolia
    | Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      Or maybe it could mean that because you are such a great, moral guy, you are stingy with your love because you know you have VD. I must know- Magnolia
    | Posted on 2005-02-19 00:00:00 | by Magnolia | [ Reply to This ]
      hay lamemans, sorry it took me so long to reply to you and read this. I read it once before and the last line read differently. With the change it makes me think that maybe because you gaves so freely of your love and got nothing in return that you ended up catching a VD. Is the HIV real or symbolic. Let me know. Please PM me and explain this to me. Otherwise this reads pretty well. keep it up. Haiku do kinda make you dig deep into your vocabulary to fish out words that will allow you to express your point in the proper format. SOmetimes you can lose your audience if you dig too deeply tough. I did have to fetch out the dictionary. But hay, that's my fault not yours. This poem reads like someone is seeking out love and getting nothing in returned but burned. Shed light on my vailed eyes.
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ]

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