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    dots Submission Name: Condition Of My heartdots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 572
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    Bytes: 1831



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    dotsCondition Of My heartdots
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    How much time has passed since you said goodbye.
    Got your message today asking how am I,
    Well I'm doing just fine.
    To admit the truth,
    hasn't crossed my mind.
    all I needed was some time,
    was it always this strong
    I remember all how I cried

    The night that you said goodbye,
    you expected me to die.
    But I made a brand new start,
    and got on with my life
    I did what I had to do,
    to get myself over you
    I'm not falling apart.
    you underestimate the condition of my heart

    There was a time
    You were every breath of mine
    I was ready to give the rest of my life
    You walked away, andnow you're saying you can walk right back into my life
    Like nothing happened and I won't put up a fight
    No, you left me all alone
    I wanna know, where were you when I cried?

    The night that you said goodbye,
    you expected me to die.
    But I made a brand new start, and got on with my life
    I did what I had to do, to get myself over you
    I'm not falling apart
    you underestimate the condition of my heart

    I think you said all that you need to say
    Cause it's not gonna matter anyway
    Am I getting through to you,
    I've heard it all before
    And now you've changed your mind
    You lost your only chance.
    When you said goodbye
    I wanna know, where were you when I cried?

    The night that you said goodbye
    you expected me to die
    But I made a brand new start, and got on with my life
    I did what I had to do, to get myself over you
    I'm not falling apart
    You underestimate the condition of my heart




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      What a great song. After I read this line:

    "I'm not falling apart.
    you underestimate the condition of my heart"

    I knew why you named your song that and I most agree. Very descriptive and very flavorfull, it's very expressive in nature and it implants the feeling in my head that I've had once before, which is always quite an amazing thing to do with just writing alone, not even the music to compliment the lyrics. So I must say that all together I enjoyed it very much.

    So may I ask, what type of music did you envision this with? What did you write it for? I'm partial to rock so that's how it first came to me, but I would like to know exactly what you want with this work.

    The only advice I can think of at the moment is to use a few more enticing words that put a little more emotion into your work. Just little things like using "liquid fragments of overwhelming emotion" instead of just "crying." But I don't want to impose my style too much on you so that's all I can say. Thanks for posting, and keep up the great work. Congratz.
    | Posted on 2005-02-20 00:00:00 | by majinkenshinamv | [ Reply to This ]


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