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Now I See


Author: InYuco Katan
ASL Info:    22/M/Tx
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Now I See



Title: Now I see.
Author: InYuco Katan

Now I see the true you
Making me think that it was him
Now I see that it was you
You just pushed and pushed him

Now you will pay
You'll pay for what you did
He will make you pay
Everyday he will make you relive what you did

You get pissy
when you don't get your way
Don't be a pussy
I think that you should pay

I don't want to hear your shit
because your always the one to blame
I can't believe that you did it
I always thought he was the one in the flame

Pay bitch for the pain that you made him fill.
Pay for the lies and the angush that you made him fill today
Then you hit me with the past that is not of your concern
You can just abandon all of your frinds this day

Im glad that i have Jonathan Davis' lyrics
so I can listen to them everyday
Thanks to Jonathan Davis because I have spirit
Now he shall make you pay




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  don't want to hear your [censored]
because your always the one to blame
I can't believe that you did it
I always thought he was the one in the flame

Pay [censored] for the pain that you made him fill.
Pay for the lies and the angush that you made him fill today
Then you hit me with the past that is not of your concern
You can just abandon all of your frinds this day

Im glad that i have Jonathan Davis' lyrics
so I can listen to them everyday
Thanks to Jonathan Davis because I have spirit
Now he shall make you pay
| Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
  don't want to hear your [censored]
because your always the one to blame
I can't believe that you did it
I always thought he was the one in the flame

Pay [censored] for the pain that you made him fill.
Pay for the lies and the angush that you made him fill today
Then you hit me with the past that is not of your concern
You can just abandon all of your frinds this day

Im glad that i have Jonathan Davis' lyrics
so I can listen to them everyday
Thanks to Jonathan Davis because I have spirit
Now he shall make you pay
| Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
  don't want to hear your [censored]
because your always the one to blame
I can't believe that you did it
I always thought he was the one in the flame

Pay [censored] for the pain that you made him fill.
Pay for the lies and the angush that you made him fill today
Then you hit me with the past that is not of your concern
You can just abandon all of your frinds this day

Im glad that i have Jonathan Davis' lyrics
so I can listen to them everyday
Thanks to Jonathan Davis because I have spirit
Now he shall make you pay
| Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
  don't want to hear your [censored]
because your always the one to blame
I can't believe that you did it
I always thought he was the one in the flame

Pay [censored] for the pain that you made him fill.
Pay for the lies and the angush that you made him fill today
Then you hit me with the past that is not of your concern
You can just abandon all of your frinds this day

Im glad that i have Jonathan Davis' lyrics
so I can listen to them everyday
Thanks to Jonathan Davis because I have spirit
Now he shall make you pay
| Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]
  don't want to hear your [censored]
because your always the one to blame
I can't believe that you did it
I always thought he was the one in the flame

Pay [censored] for the pain that you made him fill.
Pay for the lies and the angush that you made him fill today
Then you hit me with the past that is not of your concern
You can just abandon all of your frinds this day

Im glad that i have Jonathan Davis' lyrics
so I can listen to them everyday
Thanks to Jonathan Davis because I have spirit
Now he shall make you pay
| Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Raistlin Sith | [ Reply to This ]


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