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    dots Submission Name: I Loved You...dots
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    Author: ForsakenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    6.37 - 147/73/18
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Hey I wrote this for a guy, obviously. I just can't seem to find the words to tell him how I feel and even this poem doesn't explain the half of it. I know my love poetry sucks but by nature I am dark and depressing, so that is what I am good at. I just hope that I will be able to tell him how I feel when I see him and that I don't freeze up and lose my chance to tell him how I feel. Wish me luck... I also want your thoughts along with a general review if you want to, or you can do either or.


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    dotsI Loved You...dots
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    I loved you the moment we met...

    From the moment I heard your voice whisper my name...
    I have loved you.
    The moment our eyes met in our first gaze...
    The first time you made me smile...
    I have loved you.

    Even when I tried to forget.
    When my life seemed hopeless...
    I had my love for you to guide me through.
    Even when I said I did not...
    I loved you.

    I have always loved you.
    I loved you then...
    And I love you now.
    There are no words to express how I feel.
    So I leave you with this...

    I have always loved you.
    And I always will...




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      well the wording was simple and such, but i like the fact that you didnt make this a lovey dovey poem. i know this is a love poem, but you didnt take it to a level of cliché flowers and chirping birds, if you know what i mean. I also like how you repeated I loved you. you didnt do it to a point that i felt it was shoved down my throat, but enough that you can feel the emotion in it.
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]
      it seems to have more insecurity than love in it, i mean (oh i dont want to be mean or sound like an idiot but here goes) love is about letting go of yourself, you are no longer just yourself, it feels like you are only ever yourself when they are around. Love is about sharing everything, and saying how you feel, you can tell someone you dont love that you love them pretty easily, but its so much harder to tell someone you are in love with that you dont love them.
    i hope you are sure about how you feel, if not let things simmer till you do, good luck, and dont ever say something you dont mean
    ellisa
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]
      I could'nt of said it any better. I feel you on this one. Love is always leading to pain and confusion. good writting here keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey ppl yall should really lay off the questioning of her love peoms. Forsaken is really talented with her dark depressing writings so when she writes things like this it doesn't always come out like she wants b/c she isn't used to it. So back the hell off of her love poems unless you have something nice to say.

    ria
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by ria_pixie | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, that was somehow really interesting! I really am not sure if I have read any of your poems before! But anyway after reading this one I think I may read more of your poems and also may look out for your posts every now and then!

    And now about the poem; first of all I want to talk about the description, as I believe that it is a very important tool for the writer to make a good presentation or introduction to the reader before reading the poem itself! And I noticed what you said about you not good in love poems and only good in depressed or dark poems! Well I can't really confirm or deny that because I haven't read any of your other poems to judge so I will talk only about this one!

    And talking about this poem I can say that it was very well written and the idea or the subject of the poem was simply presented, just honest and simple presentation of the idea, I think that the idea of writing a love poem to someone is a very beautiful thing even if the poem wasn't good, because somone somewhere somehow spent the time and the effort in writing it!

    I think you have put so much emotions in this poem, and I really felt the sincerity in the poem eventhough I think it wasn't easy letting these emotions out and that's what I felt while reading the poem.

    I liked the last part (the finale)

    "There are no words to express how I feel.
    So I leave you with this...

    I have always loved you.
    And I always will..."

    I think when you see him the next time you should give him this poem because like they say "Never underestimate the power of words" and who knows what will happen! So the nest time take a deeeeeeeeeeep breath and let it all out!

    Anyway I hope that my comment was somehow helpful to you and I'll end my comment by saying Good luck and keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
      You said this wasn't good, but it was. You seemed to go over the same thing once or twice with a little variation each time you said it, it was still good though. This poem made me feel very sad, reminding me of the hard time I had when I hadn't told, Butterfly how I felt. The last part got me good, again, I think everyone is a sucker for a good ending. Anyway, again, PLEASE come on and tell me how it went, please!
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by TDALBH | [ Reply to This ]


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