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    dots Submission Name: tea-timedots

    Author: _taateli_
    ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/113/29
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       something i wrote after drinking tea.

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    one drinks, one drank, one drunk
    psychedelic dream
    with the mushrooms (mushrooms)
    dancing before your eyes
    no alcohol, no cigarettes burning from both ends
    no neon-moon
    the consequences of
    tea with the flavour of

    Submitted on 2005-02-21 03:24:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your style is original, but i feel that this poem is missing something, not sure quite what yet, but something to make it more...less about tea...or maybe more about tea, i suppose what im saying is it needs more of something, it doesnt seem whole yet.
    thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]
      ...and so Alice enters the teenage years. loooove it! the emphasis on mushrooms is awesome- and don't worry- 'ellisa' doesn't seem to get much of my stuff either... she thought '<<singe>>' was about a monkey... i was like 'no...' it's about burning people and liking it! *sigh* the part about neon-moon gives it a southern flavor a little bit... and the last lines pull it all together... everything that's going on is a result of this... am i correct? nice write grrrl. now off to an emergency meeting at work... a gas station - that has emergency meetings... go figure... *md*
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      keep doing shrooms and you'll paint the perfect room. Leave the door unlocked and don't exspect any to walk inthrough it as for they only see it as a wall with no way through. Just don't let them sing through the cracks and holes. keep up the good writes.
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]

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