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    dots Submission Name: Drunken Godsdots
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    Author: _taateli_
    ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/113/29
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       this is something i've written in many pieces, those are all small bits of different poems of mine and i combined them and this is what became. i know, not necessary the best way to write a poem, but i kinda like this. again, weird.


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    dotsDrunken Godsdots
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    give me my god,
                   please?
    a necessary,
    uncomfortable equation,
    poisoned, pleasant, bad, longing
    life,
    and a
    sickly beautiful world
    --when,
    I lie on the ground
    I'm sad, I'm drunk
    my wrists itch,
    Iíd like to scratch, rip sulphur,
    cut deep
    no-one believes
    --fingers numb with the cold
    I kiss the cement
    the darkness tangles around
                   I shiver
    I want home
    but
    there is no such thing
    the shadows grow
                   and strangle
    existentialistic panic
    the colourless reality strikes
    again.
    the ugliness of the world comes conspicuous
    though,
    no one has yet realized
    life doesnít work
    why not?
    --wake up, this is the Reality, welcome.
    Iíll take myself to another place.
    continue.

    where is my god now?




    Submitted on 2005-02-21 03:41:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this does fit, the lines really are of a similar cathartic kind which just shows that these poems must have been similar in the first place. Perhaps that says something about the way you write...
    ellisa
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this one to, hella true. deep and dark. this is a good write and a good view of the world today.the ugliness of the world comes conspicuous
    though,
    no one has yet realized
    life doesnít work
    why not?
    That part and how you worded it was my favorite. the world is a [censored]ed up place and I don't think the sheep will ever wake up.
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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