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    dots Submission Name: Sheerdots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Just some fun with rhyming, also another expression of the love for my love.

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    The moment is near
    The intent is clear
    Devoid of any fear
    Forever you are my dear

    I fight a spear
    Which plunges my ear
    The words never mere
    Poison meant as jeer

    If I were a seer
    To see our year
    Laid out before as peer
    Clarity of thought appear

    Simply to change gear
    And beckon loves pier
    To walk with you here
    Old baggage we shear

    Our moment is near
    Our intent is clear
    We devoid any fear
    Forever YOU are my dear

    Submitted on 2005-02-21 09:18:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      If you know me at all, you know I love the rhyme. This is cute, a little jumpy in places, but it seems like you had fun with it. I like the thought behind it especially in the fourth stanza and your reference to baggage. Guy, we all got baggage. All in all, a good write.

    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your goal was reached with this poem, a tad silly,fun,yet loving

    Sometimes we just have to write stuff that's isn't trying to change the world or tell a powerful story.

    Good write
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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