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Just Being You


Author: PookiezBookie
ASL Info:    16/f/az
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Words: 104
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Thinking


Just Being You



When I look into you eyes I see love and it reminds me of the sun that shines above
and no matter where I am or the time of day
without hesitation I would stand up and say
that I do love you till the end of my time
and I still cant believe that you are mine
With yourt gentleness and kindness
my heart fills with joy just the sound of your voice brings me down to my knees and yet the truth lies within your eyes. your lips tell me that you love me and your eyes can show me the world




Submitted on 2005-02-21 14:38:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Okay lets try this maybe....

When I look into you eyes I see love
it reminds me of the sun that shines above
no matter where I am or the time of day
without hesitation I would stand up and say
that I do love you till the end of my time
I still cant believe that you are mine
With yourt gentleness and kindness
my heart fills with joy
the sound of your voice
brings me down to my knees
yet the truth lies within your eyes.
your lips tell me that you love me
your eyes can show me the world

It just works a lot better that way, easier to read and makes more sense
Okay this was sweet though not my favorite kind of poem.
Nice work though
| Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it the way it is. I see you write like me and theres a big differance in meanning the way you wrote it and the way the last comment said to write it. the way the last comment told you write it is saying you cant believe he's still yours now after all the crap. but how you write it ,it saying you cant believe hes still yours as you stand ant tell him you wold love hime for ever. like i said to begin with dont ever change your style of writting. trust me your good its just some people arn't ready for uniqueness and thnk they know everything.if some one tells you to chnge around your words then they probly cant understand it. stayy cool and keep writting these deep poems, I love your writting.
| Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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