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    Author: Tidal33
    ASL Info:    25/F/Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 20/28/23
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1034
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    You're Beautiful
    Why do you hide your face?
    Making believe that this is happiness

    Why do you cry so all alone
    When no one comes to help
    But you still surrender to their call

    You dig your whole without a shovel
    The cuts on your hands bleeding their hate
    You wish you could be someone else
    But you still remain

    The pictures on the wall
    Begin to fade without a tale
    Plastic soteries set in the sand
    Wash away with the rain

    You wear your mask on backwards
    And expect the world not to see your face
    But transparency has taken over
    And exposed your fake to me




    Submitted on 2005-02-21 17:44:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey I really liked this one.just in case you didn't catch it,you said whole instead of hole.In the beginning of this I thought you liked the person by saying they're beautiful and that they cry and stuff,but in the end you make it seem like you don't like them,is that on purpose?
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by ColdinSummer | [ Reply to This ]


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