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    Author: gypsy83
    ASL Info:    21/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 49/66/24
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 911
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 937



    Description:
       I JUST WROTE THIS BECAUSE I WAS BORED AT WORK. IM NOT SURE ITS GOOD SO ILL LEAVE IT UP TO YOU GUYS TO DECIDE THANKS :0)DEDICATED TO MY WONDERFUL BOYFREIND


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    dotsTHE PAINTERdots
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    WHAT COULD I SAY
    SITTING HERE IN THIS PALE COLD ROOM
    WISHING I WAS SOME PLACE THAT I AM NOT
    I LONGINGLY GAZE OUT OF THE WINDOW
    THE SKY NOW BLACK AS COLE
    THE TREES SWAYING IN THE WIND
    DOING A DANCE FOR MY BROKEN YEARNING HEART
    I THANK THEM WITH A WARM SOFT SMILE
    AND THEN MY EYES FADE
    AND RECEED BACK TO A DENCE ICY STARE
    IM MISSING YOU...
    WHY AM I HERE WHEN I CAN BE NEXT TO YOU
    IN THE BED WE SHARE
    TASTING AND TOUCHING
    WHAT MOST MAY NEVER EXCPIERANCE
    FOR I HAVE FOUND TRUTH IN YOU
    IN THE TOUCH OF YOUR FINGERTIPS
    GLIDING OVER MY FACE, MY LIPS
    YOU LICK THEM AND GENTLY SMOOTH MY BROW
    WHAT A PRETTY PICTURE I PAINT OF YOU IN THE DULL OFFICE LIGHT
    AND I WILL PAINT THIS LOVE AGAIN AND AGAIN IN ALL THE MOST BEAUTIFUL COLORS
    UNTILL THE TIME COMES FOR ME TO GO....





    Submitted on 2005-02-21 19:19:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful....absolutely magnetic....I was pulled in and amazed.....thank you for such beautiful words......I'm wondering why it's in Caps though....whatever...it's still a beautiful poem...
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
      I am confused... is this poetry or just longing? Whichever I did find it very descriptive of your feelings. Lucid and well structured. However, can you tell me if there is an opening at your work for another poet wanna be? I would so love to be able to write poetry (or at least my attempt at that) AND GET paid.
    Ben
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      Good ,real good. I really liked this one alote. Whoever your talking about is a fool for not being there now with you. I love every word of it. This is going to my fav. good, good,good job, keep up this deep passionate writting.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]


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