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    dots Submission Name: uncaged from the twisted Tonguedots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       the title is "Uncaged from the twisted tongue" aka "I dont believe it love"......enjoy


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    dotsuncaged from the twisted Tonguedots
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    I wanna write a love poem
    but I'm not in love.
    I don't blush thinking about his smile
    or lie awake at night
    tossing, turning, wishing he was next to me
    I don't
    wait by the phone,
    convincing myself that he's just not at home
    or busy
    because the thought that he just doesn't care
    is alittle too much to bare and I
    don't-
    hang on his every word
    cause that thought is just absurd
    I am too much like a bird
    to be caged on his twisted tongue
    I wanna write a love poem,
    wish I could write a love poem
    but I don't believe in love.




    Submitted on 2005-02-21 19:43:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      don't worry about, love poems are silly. The use of "wanna" adds emphasis to the sense of apathy I get from this poem. Why write a love poem when there is no powerful feeling of love to bring inspiration? It's interesting how bird adn absurd sort of randomly rhyme out of the blue. It could use a little moe description, but i like the title
    ~VanillaLeaves
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by VanillaLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. it's opposite of what everyone else seems to put out there, which is refreshing. and sometimes I don't believe in love either-I think it's akin to an addiction and the withdrawal is more painful than any drug. so I have to give you kudos for this one!
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this too, its kinda a love poem about love lol. i however do believe in love, but you have portrayed so well what loving someone can do to a person in the negative. tossing and turning, losing sleep etc.
    i think it could use a little punctuation, but then again im kinda a punctuation nazi so dont mind me. other than that i like it
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by SilentWhisper | [ Reply to This ]


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