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    dots Submission Name: Happy Poemdots
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    Author: BuryThisLie
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Virginia...
    Elite Ratio:    4.77 - 17/22/5
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 948
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 958



    Description:
       I was making this because everyone whined "You dont make happy poems" so here one is... for all you who didnt think i could.... my happiness is here!


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    What a wonderful day it has been
    soccer balls flying
    and bruises being made
    It's days like this i know Im alive
    The body to body contact
    The sweat, and the pain
    Makes me happy

    It came today
    The letter of my collegiate future
    Ive been accepted for 2009
    CNU all the way baby
    now all i need is to calm down and tell my mom
    she'll be happy, so Ill be happy
    Hooray for happiness

    No sarcasm meant so dont look for any
    Best day of my life
    The day soccer started
    and the day, my college spot was made
    Nothing compares

    I still miss friends more than anything
    but for now
    happiness is ok
    because i deserve it every once and awhile
    Smile SMILE!!!
    If i can you can!
    Now to stop being so happy, and feed my stomache...
    then...
    Ill be even happier!




    Submitted on 2005-02-21 21:21:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yay! I know exactly what you mean in this poem. There's no feeling in the world - not seeing the guy you like, not making an A on that blastedly hard test, not anything - that's quite like that adrenaline rush that comes from running full out after that round, black and white sphere, crashing into other players, getting a mouthful of mud, blood splattering your jersey... okay, maybe no blood but yes, I'm completely there with you. The part about being alive... there really is hardly anything like that feeling of elation, so pure and unspoiled by all of the unhappiness in the world. Thanks for sharing!
    -Secret
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      i can't say i really feel this one all too well. I guess i can't connect. but i don't think the structure helps all that well. I don't know i can't see soccor being somthing that's like write worthy, but then again i'm not into sports like at all so that's probably just me.

    i do really like the end of this though, it's like saying yeah it's ok to be happy i deserve it which is cool

    later
    skilless
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
      Way to express your happiness in a refreshing way. Hooray for you on that and for getting accepted! Good job and good way to relate it to words.
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe the feed my stomic part was the part that actully made me happy. you are the only one who had a happy poem tonight. everyone esle is some sort of love and sadness.
    it was actully almost to happy for me.
    but you did it it is indeed a happy poem.
    -snuff
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it! Although I didn't find anything wrong with your other poems...I don't want to be mean but you seemed, uhm, detatched? I think thats what I'm looking for. Like this was something that you only did for others (which you said it was, so I don't know why I just told you...) You do deserve to be happy!

    Boop!

    I lurve you Stalker/Stalkee! <3 Stalkee/Stalker
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      O my sweet titty [censored] jesus, what a hot-ass picture. did u do her? or at least knock her the fvck out for biting ur lip like that? anywayz, lets get down to business:
    What a wonderful day it has been
    hairy balls flying
    and bruises being made on my supple anus
    It's days like this i know Im homosexual
    The body to body contact [ this is soo hot ]
    The sweat, and the pain [ the blood ]
    Makes me happy:what the fvck is your problem. u gotta find a chick thats been around, maybe not such a virgin that u make her bleed, cuz im sure u don't have much of a penis. ummm... pretty goo, pretty good.
    eat sh1t and fvck a goat
    | Posted on 2005-03-07 00:00:00 | by mimicryJT | [ Reply to This ]


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