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    dots Submission Name: On Track.dots
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    Author: Torie
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 176/194/40
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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       I am not much good on the roadway because I don't know where to go. I am so tempted by the fields on either side. So I just kind of sidle off.
    Victor.


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    I don't know what to do. Do you?

    They all know what to do
    And they know what you should do.
    It's not so much they are locked in a box,
    It's more they insist you remain on track.

    But how easy it is to step off the roadway
    Onto the verge,
    And from the verge onto the field,
    With horses in company beside the water trough.

    The Bush grows down around the field with inviting arms.
    Should I gallop a horse up the hill?
    Or should I explore so slowly, I move with the sun.

    The rabbit startles under the bush
    And I see the red tail of the fox.

    While the trucks thunder by on the roadway.

    On track.

    Victor.




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      Stay on track, you idiot. No one will want you if you lollygaggle in the fields. Do you think the horses care? They care more for the water trough than you.
    On second thoughts you would be a menace on the roads, causing accidents and road rage. There is no place for you on track.
    Go on, sidle off.
    You old sidler, you.
    Victor.
    | Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]
      You rarely fail to amaze me.

    It's been my silent observation that the better the poem the rarer the comments. I explained why I think so, as well as the fundamental logic and reasoning in my latest journal entry named 'poetry stinks'.
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by Lostinbeer | [ Reply to This ]


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