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look to the past

Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Words: 214
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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look to the past

African Warrior, Gentle and strong.
It won’t be long.
The present won’t last.
Look to the past
To see the leaders and the kings
Look for the one who sings
The one to whom Alex Haley
Went to see.
The women who let the slaves go free.
You know Tubman, but do you know Shad,
Mary Ann was the one who had,
A law degree, after being free.
Do you see the philosophy?
Free your mind from your own pain.
Listen to me as I explain.
Don’t let their trials be in vain,
They broke free form slaverys chain.
You come from warriors, you come from kings.
You can soar so high from your legacy’s wings.
Shaka Zulu, Selassie high,
Fertile forests and lands so dry.
Claude Mckay, Langston Hughs
Ella and the lady that sings the blues.
See line woman,
See her rise,
Madam Walker and her hair surprise.
Rosa Parks and Doctor King.
Marvin Gaye, can you hear him sing?
Brother, brother brother,
Still Far too many of you dying.
WE need more of you out there trying,
To continue the dream.
To be a team.
March more than a million deep.
Let those that doubt you scream and weep.
Live in fear, that the day is near
For a colorfull nation.

Submitted on 2005-02-22 00:22:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I'm w/poeticblindness here. I prefer this one. I feel like it makes a bigger statement, and more smoothly. However I really like this part from the other version:

"Unbeatable. Unreachable.
Unshakable. Untouchable. Undeniable.
With a future as strong as the past."

and I think it would rock if you found a way to fit it into this version. Powerful statement. I really enjoyed this.
| Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by parabola | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm. i see a difference! more hisotrical to me. historical and deep. like this one better. gave me more to think about. not just about salves and whatnot but just life. and phrases were real powerful.

Let those that doubt you scream and weep.

even though its simple it speaks out powerfully. lovely.
| Posted on 2005-03-28 00:00:00 | by poeticblindness | [ Reply to This ]

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