Wow. Describing a orgasm through haiku. Me like. I never thought that anyone could do that. Even though I ve turned love poems into haiku poetry, I never thought of putting descriptions of orgasms into it. Thats so tight. But I'm sure any talented person can do that. Thats the first orgasmic haiku poem that I have ever read. I mean, its right to the point. Gosh, I wish more people who are so passionate could write haiku besides on nature. YOu can write it on many subjects. Even I knew that. I've probably written over 40 haikus now. Well, great job. I wanna read more from you.
Ben just for my own clarity lol this is a Senyru not Haiku dealing with human nature right? And so beautifully done I love it! "Crescendo" is just a pretty word to look at and to say. This senryr speaks volumes in passion keep writing them for us. `always poetry, cheryl.
Not the conventionl haiku using nature to unfold an ideal but contemporary/senryu. Correct 5-7-5 format. This just reads so eloquently but also so vividly I read a song beening release as if it is being born or a women experiencing loves sweet sexual release. Two poems in one masterfully achieved! Japanese haiku have no titles and this haiku/senryu can fly without one.
At first I thought a haiku was too confining to discribe such an event as an orgasm, but once again the simple path proves to be the best. You did a very nice job here. Using a song as a vehicle to show the feeling is a good touch. The crescendo line is also well chosen. All in all a well crafted piece. Thanks for the read! dmm
Awesome! Your words fit perfectly into the form and the passion you meant to show. Although, being more about humans' nature than the natural world, I'd call it senryu. Which would be just like haiku in construction, but with a human theme of some kind, rather than nature-themed. I agree with dmm...the choice of 'song' really carried the piece. I liked it very well. A new fav for me. :)
ohhh ahhh!!....Love it !!...What an incredibly beautiful way of describing it ...I truly love it ...Using a song as the bases of what she feels is just...*sigh* ...Sorry im in awe and i dont even like Haiku ..... Blessed Be
What you can say with so few words! I am just starting to study haiku and there is alot of material out there, alot of thought forms. opinions, etc. I am by no means an expert. Your words were strung together seemingly effortlessly and I want to put this on my bedroom mirror in lipstick. Magnolia