Okay I love short poetry, you know this already by the other comments I have made on your poems...but this one for some reason feels as though it needs to be a little longer....can't put my finger on why, i just feel there is more to be said with this. Maybe even only another 10 words would finish it off. maybe it's because the other one i read was about 40 words...but i dont know...don't get me wrong it's still a good poem, i just feel it could say a tiny bit more.
still, it's your poem, your message and i enjoyed reading it. thanks for sharing it!
YIKES! i remember now how jealous i am of your ability to write SOOOO much in so few words... i have a write that says pretty much exactly this but with millions more words almost...
its odd that i would read this tonight... i am sitting here wishing i could ring my boy who i wrote my version of this write to and yet he is dead and has been for well over a year now and well... uuggghhh... i just wanna hear his voice already again... it scares me that i may be forgetting it...
yup... very powerful write... i hate nights like this... but perhaps its more knowing if i did ring he wouldnt answer... awesome write chic
I thought I had commented on this piece when it first appeared, but since I don't see it, I guess I must have wandered off . . . I hate it when I do that!
No one says more with less than you, B. You can break a man's heart with a single word, and level mountains with a sentence. Heaven help us if you start paragraphs . . . or, dear God! PAGES, or . . . oh, sweet Armageddon!
Whooo... I'm liking this... I think it's a real embodiment of "short and sweet". It really moves very well, and the introductory lines give a real flow of their own, slightly sing song. My only nit is "grief" should be grieve.
Regret... for all the things we never say. I can understand that, and I think it makes me feel better now to know that being honest and outspoken means I should not suffer from this regret so much. But lost love? Always a regret. Enjoyed this write :)
this was very short and descriptive. its almost sad, it seems like the person your calling is not giving you the time of day. im sure many people could/do relate to this poem. i know i could. id also like to thank you for commenting on my last poem. i enjoy getting feedback xoxoxomuchlove-ash
haven't checked out your page lately, so I thought it was time I got back to it. I like this one. regret is always a part of relationships it seems; even the lasting ones. sad, though. will read some more of your poems too.
This was good short but sweet and powerful. A poem all types of people can relate to. Moving in a simple way. I would have liked it to be longer but you did get your point across. Good write. Broken DreamsX
Have been in thys moment. So thys was a form of tyme travel for me. A very nice write on such a great emotion. Without pain- how would we ever kno when we felt good! Lolfull! Peace, love and handicap parking- ~#6-
i really liked this. it holds so much without many words. i would like to say im one of those who never regrets anything, but hey om only human. its so difficult on those days that you have so much to say to someone, yet you never do! nice job!
Regret in a nut shell. My old man is famous for saying you miss 100% of the shots you don't take, but he's also lucky, I guess. Thanks for submitting the piece. -Trouble
its no wonder Y i am amazed by your writings skills, you take a book of life and reduce it to a very short poem,withou missing a beat. here's a really big hug.
It was awesome to feel you regrets jumping off the screen for all to feel,because we have been there even when we have tried our hardest not go there.
look over here. I am giving you a standing ovation.
I think it's this line that is telling, because it suggests the subconscious trying to get through..
distractedly calling your name
the name has still got to be there inside you, or someone is still shouting it, who knows? Also, when a relationship is ended without a firm resolution, neither partner does let go fully and the conversation continues, just as you illustrate. Interesting write, deep and honest, hope you don't mind my cosmic interpretation. I think it's matter for the soul. Thanks for sharing this one, peace,
For some reason I can strongly identify with this poem... it's as if you creep into the minds of people and take out the thoughts they've been harbouring. But in such a way that it feels as if it's their own story you're depicting. Simple, strong and to the point yet eternally sad and haunting with your choice of words. Nice.
Submission Name: Regret
