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    dots Submission Name: Raining on Lovedots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 868
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    Bytes: 1519



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       Just missing somebody...


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    dotsRaining on Lovedots
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    Sit and listen to the rain
    She can't stop, can't stop the pain
    Listen to it beat the glass
    The wind screams, but it will pass

    Alone in her room sits a girl
    In her head, the memories whirl
    She cries unending tears
    Felt this sorrow too many years

    Said too many weary goodbyes
    Try to forget the hurt and lies
    Sometimes she misses him way too much
    What she wouldn't give for just one touch

    The thunder rolls inside her heart
    She's been devoted from the start
    A torn soul, a tired mind
    Every time gets left behind

    But she loves and she will endure
    Of nothing else she's been more sure
    For him only she will wait
    Never knowing the ending fate

    Screaming she begs it all to cease
    Pleads with Him for her soul to release
    But then she hears a familiar voice
    A man she let go without a choice

    He gives her hope, he cries too
    Imagine what three words can do
    Their pain is exactly the same
    And so the rain, the rain it came

    He weeps for their love
    Prays to God and Heaven above
    The water may wash it all away
    Maybe he can come home, come home and stay

    It erases the hurt as bad as its been
    They both know it will come again
    Sit and listen to the rain
    They can't stop, can't stop the pain.




    Submitted on 2005-02-22 12:49:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OMG! this is so good its going into my faves. Its full of emiotions. I loved the way you used rain and the girls feelings. its so good. great work!5/5
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very beautiful. I am very glad there are more bleeding hearts out there, and I mean that in the highest form of compliment. The AABB form of the verses goes well with this; it doesn't sound akward. The ending is neat, and ties it all up. Good Job.

    Oh, and I am sorry, I used to know what it was like to miss someone like that.

    Gradually,
    Darin
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, pretty. You took an odd rhyming scheme and made it sound good. And this was so beautiful, with the rain and the pain, I'm insane. I'm serious, though, it is beautiful. It hurts to miss someone so much. I feel this all the time. Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my work, it means a lot to me!
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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