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    dots Submission Name: Innocent and Niavedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       THis is one that I wrote a bit of a while ago...tell me what you think


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    dotsInnocent and Niavedots
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    we become stranded
    innocent and niave
    closely resembling each other
    closley tied into this disease
    a sense of conformity
    that drowns us all in pain
    typically one another
    typially the same
    we become locked in
    this place is so diseased
    but we remain here
    innocent and niave




    Submitted on 2005-02-22 14:23:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is awesome. I like it a lot. It really does have a good flow to it. It makes a peson want to think about life a little more closely.
    | Posted on 2005-03-26 00:00:00 | by manda_bear | [ Reply to This ]
      Sex can be very confusing and also create a lot of problems for both parties. Your talking about sex right?

    The poem flows well
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by african_skin | [ Reply to This ]


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