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    dots Submission Name: Why I'm Strange.dots
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    Author: Silencer
    ASL Info:    25/m/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 52/66/29
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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        Something I thought up after I joined the military while mixing in some teen culture as well.


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    dotsWhy I'm Strange.dots
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    I'm a high school student.
    I'm a person.
    I'm an uncle to three.
    Look at this, I don't seem different to me!

    A son to two...
    A brother to two...
    A soldier for my country...
    Is that so odd to you?

    Why so mad; this is my dream.
    Black and gold military life for me...
    You were so angry I joined at seventeen.
    I'm sorry Dad, my urge to grow up was so keen.

    Stop you say? It is already too late.
    I'm ready and fully accept what may be my fate.
    I'm a soldier now.
    One day Dad, people will look up and say to their sons, "Dreams do come true, and that man proved how."




    Submitted on 2005-02-22 18:51:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When I joined the Navy at 17, I needed a waiver signed by at least one of my parents, I seem to recall. It was not a bad choice for me as I attended reserve drills while finishing up high school. After my discharge, I was also in the army reserves and then the national guard while I got my B.S.

    I enjoyed it but wasted a lot of my free time and money - both of which you will find you have plenty of since you have guaranteed room and board (even if the pay seems modest) and thirty (count em 30!) days of paid vacation a year from day one. Try to tie four or five day vacations between weekends and holidays if and when you can to maximize that benefit. Not many civilians get that to start off with.

    Hint, save and invest while you can, it gets much tougher if you don't develop that habbit early. Don't develop any bad habbits which might disgrace yourself or your service branch.

    I found it easy to swap between both jobs in my service branch and even branches of service, while keeping my rank and of course, time in service. If you're ambitious, keep an eye out for where the "slots" are for your next desired rank and of course train for it. This gets more critical as you progress up the ladder.

    You will come to realize that the armed forces are run by the officers, for the officers. It's really one of the last bastions of a class system, but never resent that, it works well. If you want to become an officer, apply yourself to that but do not make a big deal about it to your buddies, just get your college degree and historically the services love "mustangs", since they already know the score.
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good, although I'm not sure if the title fits, but if it helps, you're not that strange.
    I'm glad that you chose to tell us all your plans for you life, and I'm glad that you are one of the many who want to protect our country.
    Cool poem.

    Rain
    | Posted on 2005-03-30 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      Overall, I really liked this poem. I think the rhyme scheme was naive, but you had a good bit of information behind this. It made me feel like you had really thoguht this through and there was ni stopping you now. It also gave out a realiztic family-life and how your family is/was affected.

    Your meaning was sharp and the piece overall reminded me of a Smallville epsidoe where one the characters goes off to war becuse his father had recently passed away. He made up his mind on the spot, as did you. Apart from the rhyme scheme, which I really think you dont need at all, I enjoyed reading this.

    Excellent job, and great title too!

    -Kayla
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      Ver nice, you know this is a piece where you really dont know how to offer opinions and how tor what to cange because its so personal to you. I feel you though, like your dad looking at you funny when you joined, i have been there.
    Heres a sugestion you said my erge to grow up was so keen.( I know a bunch of guys back in NY that joined because they were so unsure of what they wanted to do in life that the y chose to become a soldier not because their life or want to grow up was keen but LEEN) I dont know if thats better way to describe what you were saying or not but anyway In the last 2 lines your second rhyme is ok but what you could do is add Dad I did it for you wich would also rhyme with TRUEand maybe think about lenghthining the previous line to balance out the last , Other than that that was a great piece
    At ease soldier and HEY thanks for all you do for us~L.t
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the message of your poem,bravo

    I love the risk you took writing this type of poem.

    My suggestion would be to make it seem less sing-songy.

    good write
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I really appreciate the feelings behind this poem. And if joining the stars and stripes shooters is what you want, then kudos to you for doing it. And thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by solararia | [ Reply to This ]


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