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    dots Submission Name: Yet So Untruedots

    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       this kind of has some mixed feelings in it but it is still about my feelings. enjoy it or dont? feedback much needed.

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    dotsYet So Untruedots

    Living my life day by day
    Never wanting to leave, never wanting to stay
    Why I feel this way about you, I never can tell
    I never know when you're feelings good or not doing so well
    We have had our differences I can admit to that
    every couple does, but why am I the one feelings trapt?
    smothering me like I'm something you've never had
    but then again I may be right, then why do I feel so bad?
    You treat me like I'm a queen, like I mean the world to you
    But then why do I feel like I want this relationship to be over, to be through?
    You mean the world to me, you really do
    But, it seems like you're the only one being true
    I'm too young for this, to be having this feeling
    My love for you is so strong it might burst through the ceiling
    You'll never know, but I was running around on you, could you have quessed it?
    That's why I feel that maybe we should end it
    You always have me quessing on what you're going to do
    So beautiful, yet so untrue.

    Submitted on 2005-02-22 20:41:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Alright so you say your the one wo did him wrong or what. I'd thought he did you wrong. But anyway good write and real honesty here. I like this one and it makes more since to me than you realize but I'm confused on how if he was true than why do you write in others about how he hurt you and did you wrong. Is it you who did him wrong and broke his heart? I really want to know because it sounds like what happened to me. I know my x loves me and wants to be with me but I also understand that she 's not used to being treated so good and don't know haw to react to it so she hurts me and comes back when she realizes how much she loves me. but she loves me so much that she's scared of it. And I can understand that but i never will understand why someone cam be scared of happiness, mabee she's scared she'll loose what she loves and she's scared of being hurt so she leaves and hurts me firt to shelter it cause she don't understand either. I don't know but why be with some one if your gonna cheet on them? Theres been times when we wernt togeather but we still made love like we were and knew that the other was running around. At least thats not lieing. If yu'd rather be with someone else than why be with him in the first plaace. Thats what hurt me so much cause I knew her so well that I did'nt think she would say she really wanted me and ask me out if she did'nt want to. She knew who she was getting. No surprise or something she did'nt expect, and we were best friends too. I guess I'll never know that stuff. Other than that it was really good and I felt it.Good job on this one and let me know what happened here so maybee I can make some sence out of what happened to me.
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]

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