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    dots Submission Name: What A Shamedots

    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Friendship
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       I was best friends with this girl forever. and then one say she just turned on me. Made me realize who to trust and who not to trust. Always have my eyes open on those who think they are closed.

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    dotsWhat A Shamedots

    Do you even care, because you're never ever there?
    You say you got my back when really strength is what you lack
    When you say your gonna be there you never follow through
    How will I ever know that our friendship is really true?
    Every other week you have another new best friend
    Never finishing your work from the beginning to the end
    When something goes wrong
    You can never stay strong
    Saying you will when you wont
    Saying you do but you dont
    If you're not my true friend then why are you here?
    You're not worth my time you're not even worth my tears
    You and I are just a thing in the past
    It's just a shame our friendship wasn't enough to last

    Submitted on 2005-02-22 20:47:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Real good work, I feel this one to the end. The same things you described in this is the same way's my x was. she always gave up on life and herself when times went down, and instead of letting anyone help her she made them hate her so they would leave her alone and not know how bad life was going for her. I really liked how you wrote the lines,saying you will when you won't, saying you do but you don't. I love the whole write but this part struck me the most. There would be times I was hurt because I did'nt understand why she would ditch me like she did. But sometimes she was just doing it to hide her self not to just be mean to me. I found that out from this lil story. I was at her sisters house and she showed up there. We were all hanging out and her sister asked how she had got there. Well for starts her and her sis fight and get jelous of one another. She told her sis that some guy let her use his car. Well I was getting ready to walk to the store cause it was a between cars situation, lost one finally got another now but anyway. When she said that I asked her if she would give me a ride to the corner store so I did'nt have to walk in the cold. She said no. What, I could'nt believe that because dispite what we went through we were still good friends and I knew she wouldof so it did'nt make since to me. So I said **** it and started to walk. farrther down I look back and she's walking. So I waited for her and asked, I tought you said you have a ride? She said well I lied. So I felt better knowing that. She was just trying to look better and make her sister jelouse but why go do all that. It had hurt me and it made me think about all the times she did me wrong and if they had a wierd reason for it like that did. crazy hu? anyway I really loved this one it was put togeather perfectly along with the wording, could'nt explain it any better, Kinda like my poem FRIEND OF TRUTH. Your poem explained the title to mine exactly. good, good job. I'm gonna read more now thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]

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