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    dots Submission Name: Coming Soondots

    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsComing Soondots

    The pain of living is too strong,
    I would end my life now, but I am too cowardly.
    If I could leave right now, I would,
    My time has expired,
    And I slowly feel myself fleeing away.

    My mind is racing with possibility,
    But my body fails to keep up.
    I pray for the day I can leave it behind,
    The possibilities of how are endless.
    But sometimes the thought scares me,
    Then I remember why and my mind is ready.

    Death is coming soon,
    I can feel it.
    First it was weak,
    But over time the feeling is more powerful,
    Growing stronger everyday,
    Becoming more excited,
    Ready to go,
    The fear is dripping away.
    Calm, Strong, Ready.

    Submitted on 2005-02-22 21:18:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, i guess it depends on who you are and your situation but things don't seem to get any better in life. adolescense is the very worst and once you hit adulthood you're still just as depressed but too busy to dwell on it. nice write.
    | Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]

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