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Divorce


Author: concrete_rose
ASL Info:    31/f/nc
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Words: 114
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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this poem was about my divorced parents.


Divorce



How do they feel when they know their vows are expired forever now
The twinkle in their eyes turned to hate
Relentless talks of resolutions-
suddenly they are dried abruptly.

And what should they say to each other?
The river of conversation has run dry
their souls wicked with revenge
negative as this world spins.

How to replenish that gleamfull smile
first caught in a lovers lips
Do they remember their raw and lustfull passion-
that upheveled their bodies into extreme action?

But memories are dark, water is dirty
Loves bridges now turned to ash
All of this pain for broken vows-
and I thought they were bound for life.




Submitted on 2005-02-22 21:38:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  there is so much pain the first time...i had not much emotion left for the next two...
i always thought marriage was to be forever...
but divorce is "vows expired forever"

yes, just the opposite...and we hope to do it without lingering hate, animosity...but not always possible after the ruination of a dream...an ideal that is shot to hell...

i've felt what is in this poem...and been right on the edge because of it...
| Posted on 2011-03-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
  first really good poem i've read in a long time it hurts to read it because there is such emotion in it and such truth, i mean of course the truth hurts but pain is nothing more than an emotion
| Posted on 2005-02-22 00:00:00 | by monophobic | [ Reply to This ]
  thank you for commenting on this poem. I like this poem also because it does capture a lot of the emotion that I have felt from seeing what divorce did to my parents. And you are right about pain being nothing more than an emotion and if we are strong we can conquer anything. We are never given anything that will kill us, only make us stronger.
| Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by concrete_rose | [ Reply to This ]


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