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    dots Submission Name: Electric Lilydots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Just a little piece I wrote on a night-time walk by the pond. The lily when photographed in the red lens of the flashlight came out looking electric.
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    dotsElectric Lilydots

    Green & Yellow
    Flame of Nightz
    Fenced in Bellow
    Eyes of Sightz
    Krizp brite Kolorz
    H20 2 Floorz
    Feel 1 Love
    Here & Above

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      For peole who love nature...great. For me not great. The spelling of the words I know was intentional yet distracting. I can see how you thought that it fits the electirc theme but it does not add to the beauty you tried to transcend on paper. It takes away. I like the word play in lines six and seven. Very nice. Just not my type of literature.
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the title, Electic Lily...pretty cool. Reminds me of the old Cult song, Electric Ocean, HA! The letter "Z" never gets enough use and I think you did a good job with it here. I will forever be a defender of the letter "Z"...its tough being the last in line, hee-hee. Thats all I'z gotz to zay about zat. This message has been brought to you by the numbers 2, 7 and 3 and by the letter T.
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Its a very interesting piece, quite original. I liked the title, peculiar and beautiful like the poem. As i was reading it I could picture the colours, its a very vivid poem with an atmosphere of its own. Unconventional poetry always thrills me. Nice one!
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by AutumnLeaves | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful imagery. This is unique. I wish I could see the picture, but I am forming my own inside my head. It is cool that you are a poet and a photographer. Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-07-10 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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