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    dots Submission Name: Agedots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Prose/Friendship
    Total Views: 553
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    Bytes: 353



    Description:
       My bosses birthday was the other day and I wrote him this poem. He owns a small vineyard and bottles his own wine. Just for fun.

    Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    Epiphany ; > }


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    dotsAgedots
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    Like the grapes on a vine
    that blossom
    to wine

    So is Age

    Nurtured by Sun
    Battered by Storm
    Gifted with Strength
    to grow

    Enjoy your day as you
    enjoy the fruits of your vine




    Submitted on 2005-02-23 18:31:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A wonderful red wine here, with the sweetest of aromas. Yes we live by the fruits of our labors.
    You my dear are an inspiration to us all, I just love your way with 'wordz' they really speak such volumns about your impending talent and what we shall see coming from your loving heart.
    Great work here, I have no real critizism to cause any changes. This is so very well written and carries such vibrant meaning.
    See you again in wordz.
    | Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great. It would be a good thing to put on a card. It is great that you made an origional card for your boss. That is so sweet and thoughfull. I would love to have a poem written for me on my birthday or anyday at that. It just shows how much someone cares. It also takes much more time...rather than just buying a card. You are so thoughful.
    mikki
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      Good wine, friendship.. and a beautiful day.. what more could one ask for? Aging like fruit on a vine.. I like that thought. This gives me a peaceful feeling about aging, which I will admit I'm not always so peaceful about (lol).
    Thanks for sharing it.
    Take Care!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is lovely !....I can see that written on a card somewhere ...But then it would lose its personal toucch ....The whole concept was just very pretty and sincere ....Great job !
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh that is so sweet. WEll i thought it was. I wish someone would write a poem, in their own words on a card for my birthday. I bet you brightened up his day. I bet yours was the best card.
    I love this one..

    Like the grapes on a vine
    that blossom
    to wine

    So is Age

    Nurtured by Sun
    Battered by Storm
    Gifted with Strength
    to grow

    Enjoy your day as you
    enjoy the fruits of your vine


    hmm...Maybe you can be those people that write poems on cards... Possibility
    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Might I first ask; Are you the Someones Epiphany that used to write here?
    Well written ode to the vine, and may the fruits of his labor sweeten your paychecks!
    What a way to ask for a raise. How much did you get? HAhahahahaaa!
    GRrrreat poem, and really well done. Improve nothing, for it lookks perfect to me.
    I shall be watchingover a few more of your things!
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      The sentiments and imagery were most eloquent and appropriate. It takes experience to appreciate the thoughtful words and great patience to pen them.

    This was flavorful and well fermented. Thank you for allowing the bouquet to fill our minds with its fragrance.
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      very sweet sentiments for your boss. it belongs on a card. i hope he appreciated your thoughtfulness. simple and elegant.
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I can also see it on a card - which is not a bad thing. This is a very surface-y poem, but it's perfect for someone like a boss. You did a nice thing, giving this to him - and, if I may say, a gutsy one.

    This was a lovely little write. I enjoyed it very much. There really is nothing to correct. mae
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me smile, i pictured an old lady and all the wisdom she has due to her long years of life. This is a wonderful poem, keep em' coming...
    | Posted on 2005-03-06 00:00:00 | by Ann | [ Reply to This ]


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