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    dots Submission Name: Bleeddots

    Author: Katj
    ASL Info:    17/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 103/89/24
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I just wrote this pretty quickly, but I liked it. What do you think?

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    Sometimes my brain hurts so badly,
    It bleeds out my nose.
    The eternal pounding
    Provides rhythm for the steady flow of blood-
    A deep, red river streaming down my face.
    Staining all areas below,
    Instinctually I bring one hand to my nose,
    And another to my forehead.
    Eyes squinted shut as a sign of my pain,
    One affliction to another.

    Submitted on 2005-02-23 21:36:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i don't understand, its about a nose bleed? i feel like maybe its suppose to represent something else but im just not getting whatever that is
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by monophobic | [ Reply to This ]
      i didn't like it...its not really comprehensible...i don't understand it at all...you need to clarify or something...don't hate me...
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      its confusing it starts off like you rthinking about something and you just cant get it off your mind and then it turns into well this is how i deal with it. i think it would have been more interesting if you talked about how badly it hurt to know waht is causing it but knowing you cant stop it either.
    | Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      ouch do you get these bad nose bleeds often? if you do dont you think you should see a doctor?(it could be sirious:() i dont see many errors but i don't think Instinctually is a word. i think you might have been going for instinctivly but didnt quite get it. its kind of gross too but i've seen much worse. i hope you start feeling better soon!
    keep on the keepin' on,
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]

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