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the news


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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the news



This energy, a blaze of light fills
the corners of my heart.
The anger and saddness
from the news
The new and old news.
Tidings are not comfort and joy.
The children dying.
the old are crying.
I'm filled with trying energy.
Trying to send 80 cents a day
and adopt the kid next to Sally.
Trying to get my daily Latte.
Genocides. What? Today? Right Now?
The blaze of light fades as I
settle into paying for my daily latte.






Submitted on 2005-02-24 00:48:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, that kinda really depressed me. you make such a valid argument that i completely understand. it breaks ones heart to see the things that happen and we are so busy running off to starbucks to care...

(sigh)

its a bit overwhelming

-Nikki
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by ThaCrib | [ Reply to This ]
  Reminds me of reading the paper while getting morning coffee, and how an optomistic outlook can be squashed by the blaring headlines. You paint vivid pictures of trying to get your "Latte" only to be confronted by "Genocide" "What?" "Today?" "Right now?" My favorite bits by the way.The "news" does sap our "energy", and changes our outlook on the day. You have conveyed this image quite straight forward. Our small worlds are polluted by the flow of sad events from the larger world.
"Tidings are not comfort and joy" is an original twist to the carol tune, and gets the message to the reader that all is not well.

I just liked your poem a lot, enjoyed reading it, and agreed with its message.

Phil
| Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by phil askew | [ Reply to This ]
  You write points out the difference between belief and faith. For many believe there are problems in this world which require action, but few who have the faith it takes to deal with them.

A most vulnerable and excellent write!
| Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
  You know so many wrong things are happening in this world that sometimes makes me feel maybe I'm in the wrong world, perhaps there was some kind of a mistake me coming here to earth. Sometimes it gets so bad that I say to myself I wish I had stayed in heaven. Newpapers thrive selling terrible news, and the worst part is that they are mostly true. Men this world needs help, a lot of help. However, there is still some good news and that's the gospel of our Lord Jesus Christ. We really should start publicizing this as much as we can - we need to spread the message of love, peace, hope, righteousness, and so on. Good write.
| Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by smily | [ Reply to This ]
  I never watch the news anymore. I just read shee-at on the internet if the headline catches my eye...or my flunky-lacky here at work keeps me up to date on things. If I need to check the weather, I look outside...I trust my "Doppler window" more than Doppler Radar, Ha! But yes, there are so many things out there today that are just not right and thankfully there are lattes and Pepsi's to help cope with them. I think you did a good job in expressing what you feel on a unique topic.
| Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree that the news is very depressing. I wouldn't have wrote a poem about it but that's me personally. I used to watch the news everyday. I don't watch anymore now. I rather read the paper. It doesn't seem so bad in the paper although it too is news. Got an extra latte?

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| Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
  Yes the news truly fail us,but actually its our own fault,see the news would put on pos news if that made ratings,but it doesn't, murder, wars and fire sell. what a shame,huh.

I like your honest poem,because we do go through our routines everyday and have glimpes of wanting to make a difference,yet we feel powerless or hopeless.

very good write
| Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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