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    dots Submission Name: My Frienddots
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    Author: Lareth
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 103/139/48
    Words: 366
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I had a friend that was going through a hard time, he was cutting himslef and I didn't find out until he was send to a mental hospital. I had not even heard from him in a while. I wrote this in hopes to give it to him someday, and I hope you will like it as much as he will.


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    My Friend

    Why donít you say that you are hurting?
    Donít you think we care?
    Before you do something awful,
    Know that we are there.

    I will help if I can, how I can,
    And when I can.

    I canít promise a perfect life,
    But pleaseÖdo not end yours.

    I heard about what happened,
    I never knew.
    Please let me help,
    At least to comfort you.

    One last thing,
    Before I go.
    Something else,
    That you should know

    I know someone that can help,
    No matter how you feel.
    But you have to open up,
    And be willing to heal.

    A friend that I have depended on,
    He saved my life.
    He helped me with friends,
    And my future wife.

    I donít know what you think,
    Or if you will try.
    But heís changed my life,
    Of this I will not lie.

    His name is Jesus,
    I know it sounds clichť.
    But he changed my life,
    That much I will say.

    I ask that you ask me,
    The change I have had
    Listening to,
    My heavenly dad.

    I can appeal in my way,
    That is left to me.
    But whatís left to you,
    Is your life to be.

    No matter what you do,
    No matter what you say.
    We will all love you,
    In our own special way.

    I ask that you ask,
    Jesus what to do.
    He freed me from pain,
    Heíll also free you.

    Itís a step you must take,
    And of course I will pray.
    No matter what you decide,
    God loves you anyway.

    Life is never easy,
    And is not for me.
    But it is worth it,
    One day you will see.

    Please listen to my plea.
    And hear what I have to say.
    I know that there is only one God,
    One love, one life, and only one way.

    Until we meet again,
    I say farewell.
    When I see you again,
    I will have more to tell.

    But as for now,
    This book is closed.
    I send my love,
    Within a white rose.


    We all love you Mufasa,

    Luke Weaver




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      I feel bad for this kid, obviously if he is cutting then a corny jesus propaganda poem is not going to cheer him up. And before I judge too harshly consider this, why are you introding him to Jesus, is it because he is your "shelter" or is it because witnessing to him will not only help your chances of "getting into heaven" (if such a thing can be done) or is it because you feel self rightous next to someone who cuts himself. I know you think you can help him, and the fact that you care enough to write this is notable...but don't do it for yourself, and don't think the only way to help him is to introduce to him something that works for you...maybe you should be a real friend and be accepting of him whethor he believes in Christianity or not.

    sincerest
    Ava
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by madhatress | [ Reply to This ]
      There's no better gift, than the gift of a friend. The Lord was certainly using you here, as a light, as a vessel for his love. This piece shouts out how much you care for your friendship with this person, and how ultimately, you wish for him to find the Lord, and feel the peace you've found for yourself. I pray for you, and your friend, in hopes that one day, he'll see the masterpiece in the friendship you offer him.

    Sorrel
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Luke this was an inspiring poem, with a nice flowing style, and good use of rhyme. The depth of feeling that you have for your friend is inspiring, I hope that he will take your advice and help.. but most of all your friendship, you seem a very grounded, easygoing and loyal friend. You talk about how your beliefs have helped you, letting him know about how this could help him, without forcing it upon him, or judging him by his decision regarding that.

    He is lucky to have a friend like you.

    I must also say that I admire how you respect your beliefs and follow them. Its been a long loooong time since I last saw a 17 year old who has such a strong belief in God and religion, without being freaky lol, Im truly inspired by you. My RE teacher would have liked you very much...lol...
    Thank you for this poignant, and heartwarming poem, the ending is just beautiful. (I was gonna say goddam beautiful but then I rememberd, never take the Lord's name in vain.. :D Looking forward to reading more,
    Peace out.

    P.S You've found your future wife???
    That is so sweet! Id never thought Id hear that coming from a 17 year old.. whoever she is, I think shes a lucky woman ;) lol
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      hey there Luke... told you id be back ;)

    these are kind and caring words you are sending out to your friend... can really feel how much it would mean to you for your friend to feel better... and take your hand through the bumpy ride life has become for him... the feelings you express are genuinely supportive of your friend... it always warms me much when i see people caring for each other...

    I also like the fact that you offer your beliefs in Jesus but are not pushing it either... you say that whatever he decides, it won't change a thing for you towards him... just sharing what works for you because it could be something that could help him... never know... so that, for me, is the mark of a true friend... ive had different experiences with friends on this issue and some of them were not very pleasant ones... im pointing out that part because its happened often that my "decision" was not taken so lightly... so, seeing the respect you have for your friend is something that i appreciate a lot...

    I like the way you've written this 'cause in no way do you trivialize your friend's feelings and your words are, as its been mentionned, heartfelt and honestly caring... very nice... :)

    im sure your poem reaches many people aside from myself... thanks for sharing :) do hope your friend feels better... xx

    take care *hug* xx
    | Posted on 2005-03-20 00:00:00 | by Fiine Moods | [ Reply to This ]


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