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    dots Submission Name: In Spite (REV)dots
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    Author: omnipotent
    ASL Info:    17/F/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 82/63/23
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 728
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1046



    Description:
       Since you guys hated the "nothing seems obscure" part I took it out and replaced it. It's kinda been bugging me though because I feel like the new line is too simple for the dialect of the rest of the poem. HELP!


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    dotsIn Spite (REV)dots
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    In spite of reinvention, I have remained unsure.
    Who have I always been, aside from insecure?

    In spite of recreation, I have still much to do.
    When the sun goes down much too soon, where are you?

    In spite of innovation, I have remained outdated.
    For, beyond the beliefs of my elders, I still remain sedated.

    In spite of motivation, I have ceased to understand.
    Why did you leave? Why won't you hold my hand?

    In spite of infatuation, I know not what went wrong.
    For the longest time I thought, I'm supposed to stay strong.

    In spite of practicality, I decline to mature.
    Even when I change constantly, nothing is for sure.

    In spite of new intelligence, I feel no need to think.
    For my days of R.E.M have just begun to sink.

    In spite of reality, I wish not to face the truth.
    When the flowers wilt upon my pedestal,
    There's no such thing as a dying youth.




    Submitted on 2005-02-24 10:21:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah ha. Revised and reworked. Granted the other had its problems it seemed a bit more powerful. Maybe because it was from you for the first time.
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by Silver20G | [ Reply to This ]


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