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    dots Submission Name: "Thinking About You"dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 608
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    Bytes: 956



    Description:
       this is for a girl i like and i'm stuck in a hostipal


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    dots"Thinking About You"dots
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    It's 3:00 o'clock in the morning
    I stiil can't sleep
    thinking about you makes me so weak
    Now girl follow me and the beat
    You'll be fine
    just give it time
    It someone goes by
    And doesn't look at you second time
    Girl you should feel fine
    You got me wondering how you got so fly?

    It's 4:00 o'clock
    I still can't sleep
    Thinking about you makes me so weak.
    I look into your eyes
    there as blue as the ocean
    there as deep as space
    I always get lost in those beautiful eyes
    It's alright to cry
    those tears are as beautiful as diamonds
    in a well lit room.

    It 6:00
    I still can't sleep
    thinking about you makes me so weak.
    This is been going on all week.
    Every time i see you
    it makes me want to be with you even more.




    Submitted on 2005-02-24 11:40:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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