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    dots Submission Name: Sword Fightingdots
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    Author: Rail
    ASL Info:    18-m-Washinton state
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 117/80/13
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsSword Fightingdots
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    My sword gleams at my side.
    I watch my foe’s every move.
    Every breath is noted.
    He steps toward me,
    I step back.
    Not out of fear,
    Just waiting
    Waiting
    Waiting
    Suddenly he strikes
    I parry the swing effortlessly
    Then I strike back and it is blocked
    Again I strike,
    And again it is blocked.
    We stop away and lock eyes.
    Watching,
    Waiting,
    We stand there for what seems like hours.
    Then he strikes again.
    He is swinging for my head.
    I duck,
    Then lunge
    My blade slides along his stomach,
    He collapses to the ground.
    I stand, face him and bow.
    “I salute you my dead friend”
    Then I bend and help him to his feet.
    He asks, “Shall we go again”




    Submitted on 2005-02-24 12:02:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoy your writing style, it reminds me of the way an old friend that I dearly miss(he died) used to write...he had such potential just not enough time to fulfill it...this poem brings a tear to my eye because It helps me remember...
    | Posted on 2005-03-24 00:00:00 | by SammySueYou | [ Reply to This ]
      roflmfao Well thats one way to describe our weekends isn't it Rial Ill see you after school and we can swordfight some more.
    Sammute Naru
    ~Deathbringer~
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by sammute naru | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is about two little kids who are best friends and play sword fighting. It sounds so intense in the beginning and then the end it's sweet. :) He wanted to help his friend up. Good write. It's different from the normal stuff on here.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      It sounds like 2 guys boffing or something like that. Or 2 kids sword fighting. I liked it though. The ending was my favorite.

    I stand, face him and bow.
    “I salute you my dead friend”
    Then I bend and help him to his feet.
    He asks, “Shall we go again”

    I loved it! If I wasn't at school, I would have laughed out loud, but it was so funny!

    The beginning was really descriptive, it sounded like a scene from "King Arthur" or something. Awesome job!
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]



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