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    dots Submission Name: An Evening With Youdots
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    Author: trmbngrl
    ASL Info:    20/f/MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 65/62/22
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1141
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1075



    Description:
       I was inspired to write this because I, personally, believe in love at first sight, and it happened to me...


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    dotsAn Evening With Youdots
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    Love at first sight?
    Does it really exist?
    Iíve experienced it tonight
    Itís now you I canít resist.
    One moment Iím fine,
    The next, sipping champagne or wine
    With you.

    How did I feel
    When I first looked at you?
    It was more than unreal,
    A feeling I couldnít undo.
    Your posture and grace
    Filled up the whole space;
    I love you.

    Youíre equipped with a smile,
    A glow, and a presence.
    Iím only with you a while
    And get the scent of your essence.
    The picture of us
    Leaving them all in the dust;
    I need you.

    When youíre with me I float
    Atop the world with love.
    Although I should note:
    To me, youíre above.
    Iím not worthy of you
    And I never really knew
    You.

    In a second youíre gone
    Left me for good.
    A new feeling dawns,
    I had known that it would:
    A sense of dread overcomes
    And my whole body numbs.
    Iíve lost you.




    Submitted on 2005-02-24 15:13:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      good poem. i can relate to it wich makes it better. i thought it captured the emotion you were feeling because i felt good job
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by dryken | [ Reply to This ]
      I for one absolutely believe in love at first site it happened to me the first time I ever saw my wife. I hope I never loose her for she is the breath that keeps me alive.
    I truely enjoyed reading this poem,
    !Doc~
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      Good poem.. Don't really believe in love at first sight but still.. I like the way everything rhymed (yet here it seemed that you weren't trying)..
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by EddieZ | [ Reply to This ]
      this was more predictable from the start. and i do believe in love at first sight. thats why ive been so misused before.

    Good write i enjoyed the brief flashbacks of the past.
    Thanks
    ACE
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      That's good. I've never believed in love at first sight. However, give till I graduate, so, 2 and a half years, and if I still love this guy, then I will have to say that I believe in true love at first sight. I've liked him since the first moment I saw him, and now, 2 and a half years later, I love him with all my heart. Anyway, I liked the poem. Nice job.
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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