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    dots Submission Name: HIDE FROM YOURSELFdots

    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
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    You say you have to hide your fear,
    hide your sorrow in a distant clear.
    See the moon alive,
    see your sorrow turn to fly.
    Chaising demons in their field,
    well you see your dreams killed.
    You speak of what your life could be,
    all the dreams you could of seen.
    Still chaising your sorrow to hide your fear,
    running in the blackness of your distant clear.
    You can feel the sun upon your face,
    you can feel the darkness apreciate.
    You can tell these things to me,
    but if you hide them it's you who won't see.

    Submitted on 2005-02-24 17:45:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We must face our fears or our fears will take over . i like this. My favorite part was
    Still chaising your sorrow to hide your fear,
    running in the blackness of your distant clear
    Yeah, I dig that,it leaves it up to the reader to decipher what they want is really what I like, another good one~L.t
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      A nice admonishion one friend offers to another. A good wake-up call.
    I take "hide your sorrow in a distant clear"
    means sometimes in the future it will disappear.
    by,"the darkness appreciate" I take it to mean that it only grows more burdensome.
    My favorite line:"You can tell these things to me." It suggests trust of being confidential,this the mark of a true friend.
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      i really love this poem. somehow, at the end it makes me feel really safe. i feel like i can completely trust whoever's speaking, because the whole poem is entirely right. i also liked "you can tell these things to me, but if you hide them, it's you who wont see". it feels like one last effort to get someone to trust you, and it worked on me! hehe, i don't know you, but this poem makes me feel like you're a really good person and i can trust you. -Jinx
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by jinx | [ Reply to This ]
      i did not think at first i would like this because of the titel ( my own stupid thing) any how but i soon discoverd i was yet againe wrong this is a very good pice it shows more then it dosen't. i can really relate to this pice because i have tried to run from my fears to often and i justify them by saying they don't exist (i know that sounds odd but it happens) any how i know what it is like to run from fear and if i ever tried to put that in to words i could not have done any better then what you did good job i really would like to see more and i am putting this in my favorets for sure.
    love and light
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by Archer | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this is okay but i really didnt get it. i mean the reason why i like your writings is because your style of writing is so unique and just cliques with my facinations and interests in reading all types of poerty. now you know i love your stuff but this just didnt shinw like the others. i think that you shouldnt force the words with rhyme. just try to let them come out...and anyway they do it is fine. okay write though

    | Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by PookiezBookie | [ Reply to This ]

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