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    dots Submission Name: " YOU FORGIVE AND FORGET"dots
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    Author: Raven_s Miser
    ASL Info:    16-female- wap
    Elite Ratio:    4.64 - 68/54/18
    Words: 395
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    Description:
       This particular piece is one of the worst things i think i have ever written in my life because i am sick and didn't feel well so my mom threw me off the couch and told me to write something.

    But mainly it expresses how we as people make mistakes and learn how to realize what exactly they are in particular so we can learn more about the people that we are. It also expresses that sometimes we cannot help but reminiss on how are day was lived and what we could find that was wrong with it in hopes people could forgive and forget our mistakes

    the grammatical aspects aren't important in any way so I hope you can pass them by without commentary


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    "YOU FORGIVE AND FORGET''
    The question of the day... was it all worth it?

    I used to think that everything was meant to happen for some reason or another. It was fate. It was destiny. If only words could explain what I thought could have been true if only I could wake up and face it all.

    I want to except the person that I am, I want to know that in this world i have at least some miniscule worth. To me that's all there is to keep me going from day to lone day.

    I woke up every other day of my life to realize that the sun shone high up in the sky and now I just realized what if I never saw another daylight or sunset. Was it worth it? Was I proud of how I lived my life today?

    Did I keep my promiss to myself or did I break it just like everything other word that i said all the nights before when I was to lied my head down and retired from that day. Did I have a purpose did I have a reason to be who I am today.

    Did I ever forgive myself for the wrongs that I never corrected.
    I shoud have told my mom and dad that i loved them just one more time.
    I should have taken the time to thank the lord for all he has given me.
    Sometimes I feel that he gave us feelings to descover how we feel about the person that we are today and how we could be a different more well mannered person tomorrow.

    But he gave us common sense to forgive and forget what we have done wrong and to see our mistakes.

    I don't know why I worry because I know I am only human and I to make mistakes that sometimes are not well mended.

    But this is who I am and this is what I will be for what it all is worth until I learn to except the person that I am but until the I will learn to forgive and forget

    SLR22405







    Submitted on 2005-02-24 18:15:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well this would be a real "Kick in the Pants", and very moving when applied to ones life. I'm so glad you thanked the ONE responsible for what you were feeling. I would refer to it as 'the still small voice' every one needs to listen for!
    From what you have written; you will be used Mightily if you keep obeying. YOU have a wonderful start.
    Now as far as writing, another good start, I believe he may have given you a gift, do not waste it.
    If you wish I'll share a personal story with you to extol that thought! IM me if you wish.
    GOOD LUCK, with all you do, and do all for the Glory of Him!
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there... It took you fourteen years to start realizing what some people will never. The true simplicity of complicated life. By the way in para. 4 you should say "lay my head down" and "retire" without the "ed" oh and also promise is spelt incorrectly.Bad Grammar (unless it is intentional) is important to correct as it detracts from the quality of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by rytrsbloc | [ Reply to This ]


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