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    dots Submission Name: The Momentdots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       yes i know i edited it just a bit.. ha.. it's still good.. i hope everyone is cool.. bye..

    Adam


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    dotsThe Momentdots
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    do you remember that day
    the first day i knew in my heart, was the rest of my life
    four words..

    that moment still lives in me
    the purest memory i have to hold on to..
    "Adam, I love you"

    why? how?..
    my mind was racing so hard
    how could you love me?..
    how could you choose me, of all people

    did it matter
    i didn't deny it..
    i could feel it within my very soul
    you did.. you do..

    i stayed with you so long that day..
    i could feel your heart beating wildly from here
    and you know.. i could feel my own..

    "i love you Jess"
    the second moment that made me who i am today..
    it made me something more..

    i have spent many nights looking to the stars
    wondering why we are apart
    why we can't be together

    not anymore..
    now i'll be with you
    now i can hold you in my arms

    yes.. it will be the first time
    though promise me it will never be the last..
    i have waited so very long..

    stay with me..
    we'll never have to dream again..
    you'll never have to doubt again..

    take my hand for the first time
    and walk with me
    it doesent matter where we go..
    it never will again..




    Submitted on 2005-02-24 21:53:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i cant say much to the extent of how this poem has touched my heart. this reads like the male point of viiew of the romance i had/ kinda have ...
    | Posted on 2005-02-24 00:00:00 | by butterfly wings | [ Reply to This ]
      Love is different for everyone. It's a feeling only shared between those two people who know the moment it happened that it was love. Love never dies, at least I don't think so. Love is different for everyone like I said, but love does this to everyone, "it made everything to me change forever". You used simplicity to drag us into this romantic piece. I can feel the love through your words. It might be that I know your situation or it might be because I've felt this before. Yours seems to have a happy ending now. :) I'm so happy for you. Great piece. Hugs!
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      "how could you love me?..
    how could you choose me of all people"

    Adam, everyone loves you. haha, everyone choose you, it wasnt only me, your just the one that choose me back.

    I love you, more then anything, but then again, a lot of people cant say that, but they cant say that you feel the same, now see, those lines arent only for you, its the same for me.

    Not long until we can be together.
    I love you!

    Jesse
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by Kera | [ Reply to This ]
      Alright, I already wasn't in the greatest of moods. This was...the last thing I needed to see. You know what, I should die. I told my friend I should die. I don't think I will explain to her, she will be..shocked. Yes, that friend...Kimmy.
    | Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by Crimsonpathways | [ Reply to This ]


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