Description: this one is not meant to be suicidal. true enough i am waiting for the end, not of life, but the end of this confusion and heartache. i know what i want, he does not.
tied to you always -------------------------------------------
I've practiced every word
Which will never be spoken
And cursed all the ties
Which will never be broken
Now i kneel beside you
Pathetic and bare
Begging for the bullet
These cold lacerations
That burn with your taste
Scream for the memories
That won't be erased
Now I stand before you
Arms open and waiting
So pull the trigger
wow, 2 words: short and sweet. yet the last word wouldn't tie in completely...but it does sort of. i loved the idea behind it, the whole metaphore was really risky but you worked past it. try to avoid putting capitals at the beginning of every line. you don't need them, its like saying that each line is a new sentence, or if the sentence continues onto the next like, you're randomly putting a Word(like that) in the middle of the line...which isnt exactly grammatically correct unless it's intentional. nice work, i enjoyed it very much.
Submission Name: tied to you always
