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    Author: Forgiven
    ASL Info:    27/F/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 305/260/57
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I'm not sure about this, just be honest. Even though I might kill you if you dont like it. he he


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    Lost inside a memory,
    Wanting it to remain.

    While quite in its presence
    It’s driving you insane

    Not wanting the repetition
    Of things already said

    Nor the frustration
    Of keeping this in your head.

    Holding on to something
    You say wont go away

    But keeping it in memory
    Will only make it stay.

    You have made a decision
    And that’s for you to keep

    None of its repercussions
    Will any other reap.

    Now you sit with your problem
    And the mess its came to be

    And you just keep thinking
    It’s some great mystery.

    But you’re the one who would know
    The status it would become

    You were just hoping
    The pain would lessen, some.

    So you could go on just dreaming
    Or wake to reality,

    And realize a memory
    It just what it should be.









    Submitted on 2005-02-25 14:56:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Holding on to something
    You say wont go away

    But keeping it in memory
    Will only make it stay.

    We talk things to death for no reason, as though we are going to change them. What is...is and acceptance is the only course we can take. ..these are wise words you've penned.

    Holding on to something
    You say wont go away

    But keeping it in memory
    Will only make it stay.

    so it comes full circle, and you've sorted this out in a very dignified, intelligent way. Thanks for sharing, great job.
    blessings for you and yours, Denise,
    Nan

    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice piece (and I'm not just saying that so you don't kill me...he he he) I really enjoyed the short-stanza rhyming scheme and the little story you told. This was my favorite part, "And you just keep thinking
    It’s some great mystery.

    But you’re the one who would know
    The status it would become

    You were just hoping
    The pain would lessen, some.

    So you could go on just dreaming
    Or wake to reality,"

    Initially, with my brother's suicide this is how I felt exactly. For myself, some memories are meant to be kept alive.
    I really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing. Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is my honest opinion. I thought this was very good. It had such a good flow. When I was reading this I definately thought this could become in lyrics.
    You should try it sometime. Come with a song. It would be a really amazing lyrics to listen to.
    I thought it was great..
    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      <sigh> it is the truth you give us in this piece. and i agree that some memories are just better buried. its ironic that you just happen to read trojan promises... i can see that we hold similar ideals. i wouldnt change a DAM thing about this poem. ...fizzle... take ... bye...
    | Posted on 2005-03-02 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      Putting on my bullet proof vest,lol

    I like the poem because it is truly honest,yet it also gives peace to you the writer at the same time.

    There's nothing worst than being in a limbo relationship, you can't move,you can't love and you feel like a failure.

    very good write
    | Posted on 2005-03-03 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]



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