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    dots Submission Name: Snaresdots

    Author: brokenroses
    ASL Info:    17/m/indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.93 - 191/192/62
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       just felt it. a friend of mine is sickened with love. not your average love, the sickened kind of love.

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    With light of the moon,
    The fox is caught.
    His poor foot in snare,
    He eats not rabbit
    He eats not hare,
    He pans no terrain.
    And if fox gives in,
    "Surely I am slain"
    He will lose his way.
    Never again the brightest day,
    Never again the coolest night.
    The feeble fox looses sight.

    With light of the moon,
    I confess to you.
    I pour out my depths,
    I reveal my soul.
    But you wicked being,
    And your tar-pit hole.
    Your sickened sight,
    Your dimming light.
    O shine far down,
    Bright from above,
    Shine down your snaring love.

    Submitted on 2005-02-26 03:25:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was good. i liked it because i can relate. to me it sounds like your friend is trapped in somethign but shes blind to it and only you can see it. but what shes also blind to is you.
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]

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