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    dots Submission Name: Sun Spotsdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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       It's just such an inspiring day I can't help but to want to play with my garden gnomes. he he he

    Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    Greatest of Days; Timeliss is Now.
    Epiphany ; > }


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    dotsSun Spotsdots
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    The Sun Spotted me on
    Saturday
    Flying with the Wind
    I closed my minds eye
    Timeless
    Sun Spots came to Mind




    Submitted on 2005-02-26 17:41:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was another kind of freedom poem. its short and simple yet very full of description and a slight detail to time with the sun seeming never ending.
    Good poem ill checkout your other stuff.
    ACE
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, short poems that can really express like that are my favorite, I'd love to read more, it visually and mentally drws a great picture, I really like "Sun Spots came to mind" which relates to the first line " the sun spotted me on"
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by lynn marsters | [ Reply to This ]
      loved the word play on sun spots. that was cool! i like these short minimalist pieces. you said all you needed to say. why waste more words? i could see those sun spots in my mind, like when you look at the sun and then close your eyes and there they are!! yeah...

    ~Shalom
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very pretty ...I also love the simple short structure of this....Everything you needed to say to make a vivid picture in my mind ..and complete your peice was here...without all the needless mumbo jumbo ...This was really great ...Good job
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      OK, It has been raining so much here that I forgot about the sun...thanks for reminding me that it is out there, apparently shining on wherever you are. Hey, Ya reckon you could stop hogging the sun for a day or two...we need it back here in jaw-juh.
    Very "sunny" piece.
    w
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by RJCHANDLER | [ Reply to This ]


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