I like this, short poems that can really express like that are my favorite, I'd love to read more, it visually and mentally drws a great picture, I really like "Sun Spots came to mind" which relates to the first line " the sun spotted me on"
loved the word play on sun spots. that was cool! i like these short minimalist pieces. you said all you needed to say. why waste more words? i could see those sun spots in my mind, like when you look at the sun and then close your eyes and there they are!! yeah...
This is very pretty ...I also love the simple short structure of this....Everything you needed to say to make a vivid picture in my mind ..and complete your peice was here...without all the needless mumbo jumbo ...This was really great ...Good job
OK, It has been raining so much here that I forgot about the sun...thanks for reminding me that it is out there, apparently shining on wherever you are. Hey, Ya reckon you could stop hogging the sun for a day or two...we need it back here in jaw-juh. Very "sunny" piece. w