Description: I was having a really really icky day, was pissed at just about everything, people in the hall, stupid cross word (I hate those) and just everything...people were just IRKING me. This girl in my first period made me snap, freaking out about me accidently spilling her coffee, which she wasn't even supposed to have in the first place. I said that I was sorry, and I even managed to get her jacket out of the way of the LITTLE spill. SHe's just a b-itch. Stupid whore.
Hey, tis the Piggs* WHAT? What happened to "I hope your baby gets SIDS??" That made me laugh so UBER hard over the phone! Why the diddlydosh isn't it in HERE?huh, Huh HUH!???...ta...sorry...I guess the mood of the piece is rubbin' off on me, eh? What's interesting is when you read this to me over the phone, I could FEEL the cinister nature seeping through the receiver. You just read the poem with such fervor to me, it's a shame all these lovely people couldn't have you read it to THEM...heyyyy, you should have put a spiffy alternate ending such as "Now clean up your messy coffee, don't make me spill you GUTS" or something to that effect.
well, someone's a bit angry, eh? this did make me giggle, tho. good to be able to get out your frustrations in a poem, isn't it? some people just tend to overeact at things like their coffee spilling. actually such a small little thing in light of what's going on in the world. i'd probably want to smack her, too. glad you let it out in verse instead of slitting her throat, tho!!
It's interresting how you overreact to her overeacting, very ironic, I like this kind of stanza abac, I think it creates an interesting flow, but I think in some parts it's a bit forced"Ohh my desk is all sticky!" Then don't bring that [censored] to school!
It's your own damned fault you sluttly little fool!
Hey, I liked this poem. It is no secret that rhyming poems are a fav of mine, but I also like the story or point you are making, I laughed at this because it is VERY FAMILIAR. And I just cant stand people like her...I know her well...Good write. w
The frustration in this is great...sadly i got eminem in my head while reading it ...I dunno ... i agree with lynn.....anger is such a poisoning thing ...Chances are you were pissed off.and maybe someone caught onto that ...and they got pissed off..and so on and so forth ....Like domino's ... But eh ...It was only coffee....Good write though ..Like i said the frustration and anger is great
Submission Name: Coffee Spill
