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The Beast


Author: curiosityskitty
ASL Info:    31/F/TN
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 149 /149 /30
Words: 67
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Beast



Untouchable you remain
Behind stony walls of hate
Encircling your heart
Those walls control your fate

Open up and let me in
My love will bring release
From memories that serve as chains
And refuse to give you peace

Let me give you refuge from
The beast that thrives in you
Together we’ll bring down the wall
This beast we will subdue





Submitted on 2005-02-26 22:51:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yep, thats me a total beast, waiting just over the moat by the alligators and piranna
(Spelling).
I bet though you are an expert in taming the shrew as they say, it appears this reveals the desire to at least try, and that is very commendable. I really think there is little room for improvement from my standpoint, but you are the final judge!
Great time I've had reading you, see you later.
| Posted on 2005-03-25 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
  Love is a many splendor thing and can without a doubt tame the beast and heal the scars of the past.
Open up and let me in
My love will bring release
From memories that serve as chains
And refuse to give you peace
I like the way you wrote this as it seems you are a very giving person.
I think this is a very good write, you offer the hope and the remedy.
This is proof that just a few words can really mean a lot.
!Doc~
| Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]


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