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    dots Submission Name: Of fog and smokedots
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    Author: lynn marsters
    ASL Info:    20/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 48/61/30
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOf fog and smokedots
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    Puff
    Inhale
    It burns

    A little

    Smoke rising from my parted lips
    Collapsing back on itself in a swirl
    Dissipating quietly throughout the room

    It’s like a fog

    My mind clouded
    I walk slowly, but confidently
    And open the door

    The fog in the room fades away
    The fog in my mind remains




    Submitted on 2005-02-26 23:09:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this ...I had images in my head the whole way through ...I really thought the end two lines completed it perfectly ...The fog in your mind remains....Obvioulsly not alot fog was blocking you from writing this ...Its really beautiful ...
    Blessed Be
    | Posted on 2005-02-26 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      What are you smoking...
    My momma said smoking is bad...! Lol

    I loved this poem
    I love your style
    and this is going to my favorites.

    The last two lines reminds me of myself sumtimes..

    "The fog in the room fades away
    The fog in my mind remains"
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by ariesmind | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very well written poem. Very visual.
    It's amazing how visual, with so few words spoken. If only our minds could clear as easily as the smoke. I especially liked the form you used here to accentuate. Good job. I look forward to reading more of your work.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]



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