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    dots Submission Name: My Riverdots
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    Author: Kera
    ASL Info:    18-f-NH
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 116/129/29
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Bytes: 406



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    dotsMy Riverdots
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    this river that goes for miles
    loved ones flow
    persuading me to join
    the ocean of suicide

    drop by drop
    from the void in my wrist
    I slowly entwine
    within the fiery river

    sounds fade
    to the only noise
    a dying beat
    slowly made

    a cruor image
    of what used to be
    and what
    will become




    Submitted on 2005-02-27 01:20:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      DAMN GOOD WRITE! More people need to comment on your stuff. So here you Go...lmao. uhh BTW this isnt Adam, it is Jesse...like you wouldnt know that. ;)
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
      mkay i would just like to say i completly and utterly disagree with Justin.. unfortunatly, he does not have the experience or the understanding to see exactly the depth to this poem.. to most that would look through it the seemingly randomized thoughts tell a vauge story that only the most attentitive would understand.. however, from those that actually take the time to read this several things can be spotted..

    for one, the river itself seems to be your life.. a journey you have bled by every step you take..

    also adding the element of fire to this work helps to instigate hate or rage within this river of blood..

    again i could comment on the last but i will refrain from it since i'm going home now lol.. this was a great write Jesse..

    I love you -<@

    Adam
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]


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