My River by Kera

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Submission Name: My River dots

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Author:	Kera
ASL Info:	18-f-NH
Elite Ratio:	3.67 - 116/129/29
Words:	59

Class/Type:	Poetry/Death
Total Views:	1216
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	406

Description:
no punctuation, so deal...I only wrote what was in my head, say what you will.

My River dots

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this river that goes for miles
loved ones flow
persuading me to join
the ocean of suicide

drop by drop
from the void in my wrist
I slowly entwine
within the fiery river

sounds fade
to the only noise
a dying beat
slowly made

a cruor image
of what used to be
and what
will become

Submitted on 2005-02-27 01:20:29 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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DAMN GOOD WRITE! More people need to comment on your stuff. So here you Go...lmao. uhh BTW this isnt Adam, it is Jesse...like you wouldnt know that. ;)
| Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]
mkay i would just like to say i completly and utterly disagree with Justin.. unfortunatly, he does not have the experience or the understanding to see exactly the depth to this poem.. to most that would look through it the seemingly randomized thoughts tell a vauge story that only the most attentitive would understand.. however, from those that actually take the time to read this several things can be spotted..

for one, the river itself seems to be your life.. a journey you have bled by every step you take..

also adding the element of fire to this work helps to instigate hate or rage within this river of blood..

again i could comment on the last but i will refrain from it since i'm going home now lol.. this was a great write Jesse..

I love you -<@

Adam
| Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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It means a lot to them, as it does to you.