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    dots Submission Name: Monday Morning Haikudots
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    Author: majinkenshinamv
    ASL Info:    20/M/Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    7.28 - 70/50/13
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Haiku/Comedy
    Total Views: 1234
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 104



    Description:
       I wrote this with much effort for a very good friend of mine on this web site. I hope he enjoys it, and that you feel a little bit smarter after reading it as well. Thank you for your time. Ja.


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    dotsMonday Morning Haikudots
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    I like Rice Krispies.
    They make my tummy cheer "yay."
    Snap, Crackle, Pop, b!tch.




    Submitted on 2005-02-27 03:54:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's good.

    It isn't really a haiku, though. It's a senyru, which follows the syllablization of a haiku but isn't about nature.

    Also, I dunno, the "b!tch" you through in there just didn't work with the poem. It doesn't really add anything to it, and it just isn't appropriate in that spot. Find something a little more creative to put there so it look like you didn't just get to the end and decide it was no longer worth thinking about.

    Other than that, great write! I liked the light-heartedness of it!

    -Secret
    | Posted on 2005-03-12 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      aww man...that was a good haiku.
    i thoroughly enjoyed it
    snap crackle pop B!tch!
    1000 monkeys on typewriters...

    keep up the er..good work..its funny
    voted 5 out of 5

    rain
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by raincloud | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another totally bad haiku,-realy doesn't follow the rules. BUT it is very funny, and if you didn't call it a Haiku, you would get a more positive response. As comedy 2 thumbs up, originality 2 thumbs up, -Haiku? not really–
    Good humor though
    Silver
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      wtf dude you got some balls-fair enough~L<t
    repracusions suck~ but you were right I did like it and NO I dont feel smarter . For such a pompus prick you got alotta balls, Thats good
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      this is one of the funniest i've read...
    i like the untraditional haiku because of the variety...
    keepem up...

    Pestiferous
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by pestiferous | [ Reply to This ]


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